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The following is a small excerpt from one of the articles that I have edited for SpeakEasy Spanish Communications, Inc.

The original paragraph is the conclusion of an article on The New Language of Safety by Myelita Melton. The paragraph is typographically and grammatically correct, but it lacks power and detail. needs to give the reader a stronger message that ties in with the overall theme. Using specific points from the attached sidebar helps build a strong connection and encourages the reader to take the time to read it.

There are many questions concerning how to deal with the potential dangers associated with non-English speaking workers in the construction industry. There's no doubt that jobsites will always pose some risks, however employers bear the ultimate responsibility for making the workplace as safe as possible. Increased cultural diversity and Spanish language training for supervisory personnel will continue to provide some of the answers to this complex 21st century construction issue. This critical training will become an important aspect of the new language of safety that will reduce accidents and promote increased efficiency.

The edited paragraph redirects the readers attention to the article’s theme which is that training increases safety on a construction site. It offers a few specific suggestions for safety awareness from a more detailed sidebar attached to the article.

Cultural diversity and Spanish language training for supervisory personnel will continue to provide some of the answers to this complex 21st century construction issue. A change in awareness may provide others. Think about the ways you can create a new language of safety on your job site. When translators are not available, speak slowly, be direct using short simple sentences, and when possible use demonstrations—show specific safety techniques and have all employees practice them. This critical training and facilitated communication is an important aspect of the new language of safety that will reduce accidents and promote increased efficiency.

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